Hoehne V.S Trinidad

[Intro] Kids at Hoehne earn scholarships at Trinidad only 10% do. Kid’s in Hoehne go to college and earn degrees. Trinidad has a lot of problems. Hoehne is better than Trinidad because we are always on task. [Thesis] Hoehne is better than Trinidad because it is much safer; it has fantastic sports programs, and Hoehne students place more focus on academics than fashion.
Body Para 1 [Topic Sentence] Feeling safe is a big part of learning. [SDS 1]
Hoehne School doesn’t bring knives and guns and get into fights at least once a week. [E-Elaboration] Last week here at Hoehne a kid got caught on surveillance cameras vandalizing the wall.


Body Para 2 [Topic Sentence 2] Hoehne also has fantastic sports programs. [SDS 1] The volleyball team has won two years in a row at the State Championship. [E-#1] The coaches help the volleyball team in fundamentals and in stamina. [SDS#2] Hoehne also has great kids who do what they are told and when they are told to do it. [E-#2] Most kids who do sports go into the weight room all summer long. [SDS#3] It’s a small team but a good team. [E-#3] Trinidad team is way bigger and way worse in academics and don’t care about education.

Body Para 3 [Topic sentence 3] Kids get caught with cigarettes and drugs in Trinidad. [SDS#1] Hoehne is taped with cameras and you will get caught. [E-#1] Kids in Trinidad don’t have cameras or anything. [SDS#2] WE also have teachers on duty at all time so no one gets into trouble. [E-#2] Kids will get into trouble if they do something bad. [SDS#3] It is a good community and who sells drugs in a little town. [E-#3] Trinidad people get caught in town way more than in Hoehne.

[Conclusion] The cops are never called to Hoehne. Hoehne has won the State Championship two years in a row. Hoehne is a great place to send your kids if you want them to get a good education and if you want them to be responsible.